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Post by ky on Sat Jul 19, 2014 9:04 am

Everybody clapped, tears streamed down my face. simon cowell was smiling, my song played. Ivy was laughing, for no reason. suddenly my phone bleeped, my song was all over instagram! Ivy smiled, i went over and slapped her face
"WHY did you do this??? only i put my videos on instagram!!!"
"well if you weren't such a baby i woldnt have to!!!!!" she retorted
"its not my fault it's my anxiety!"
"what anxie-"
the world went black

Meet demi and her family, the mega famous family! Demi the singer, Zak the teen dream movie star, and her life. Demi struggles friends, enemies, make ups and break ups, love hate and then comes her health, secret anxiety. no-one knows. all of a sudden her best friend joins her enemies, and her worst enemy is her best friend. nothing can be right anymore, can it?
(book 1 of the series)


DEDICATED TO MOLLY, WHO'S ROLE MODEL IS DEMI LOVATO, AND WHO FACES ANXIETY, ANOREXIA, SELF HARM AND FAMILY TROUBLE

what do you think???

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Post by Ash on Sat Jul 19, 2014 10:03 am

I think it's okay but there's also grammar spelling that should be fixed.
other than that--
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Post by Sadie♡ on Sat Jul 19, 2014 10:31 am

Ohhh lovely story! I think it's a great story, but I think some grammar changes would make it even better!<3 cc:
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Post by ky on Sat Jul 19, 2014 10:32 am

ignore the grammar lol xD

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Post by King K on Sat Jul 19, 2014 10:33 am

I really like it but I agree some of the grammar and spelling needs to be corrected ;D
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Post by Hazza on Sat Jul 19, 2014 12:42 pm

I like it, but I agree with the others.
Make sure that you capitalize all of your "I's" or when a new sentence started.

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Post by Catty♡ on Sat Jul 19, 2014 4:30 pm

omg moreee :awwwwwww:it looks interesting <33
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Post by Giselacx on Sat Jul 19, 2014 4:31 pm

I really like it!
Hope you decide to keep writing! xx
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Post by Giselacx on Sat Jul 19, 2014 4:31 pm

I really like it!
Hope you decide to keep writing! xx
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Post by Admin on Sat Jul 19, 2014 4:33 pm

This looks pretty good so far <3 Like the others said though, you need to adjust some of the grammar though in your blurb :3

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Post by ✈FlyAway✈ on Sat Jul 19, 2014 5:18 pm

If you want i can be your editor c: I'm really good language arts and I get all A's on my papers. Your story sounds really interesting, so I would love to help!
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Post by ky on Sat Jul 19, 2014 5:20 pm

@✈️FlyAway✈️ wrote:If you want i can be your editor c: I'm really good language arts and I get all A's on my papers. Your story sounds really interesting, so I would love to help!
YOUR HIRED!!!!!
 i'll keep posting the story as i write it Smile

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Post by ✈FlyAway✈ on Sun Jul 27, 2014 1:34 am

Anikano1fan wrote:
@✈️FlyAway✈️ wrote:If you want i can be your editor c: I'm really good language arts and I get all A's on my papers. Your story sounds really interesting, so I would love to help!
YOUR HIRED!!!!!
 i'll keep posting the story as i write it Smile

Yay!! Very Happy
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Post by Hazza on Sat Sep 06, 2014 11:19 pm

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